Masoom Dil ki mere
khwahish to bohot hain
Lekin ye soch kar
tham jati hu main
Saham jati hu main
Ki mere sapno ko
tutne ki adat bohot hain
Jee to chahta hain
daud kar tumhe gale lga lu
Lekin apna bnane se darti hu
Ki mere apno ko
ruthne ki adat bohot hain
Haan ! mere sapno ko tutne ki adat bohot hain
P. S my first attempt at hindi poetry,though I am using english words only to avoid numerous mistakes.
Hope you guys enjoy it ,would love to hear your thoughts.
with love
Anamika
waah! khub
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Hey dear you wrote very very heart touching……..Keep writing….
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It was impeccable and compelling.
Can you give suggestions on my poems at https://rushdas.wordpress.com/ ?
I really want reviews and suggestions. Your efforts will be really appreciated.
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बहुत ही उम्दा प्रयास, सराहनीय।
It was nice.
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Thank you :))
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Love it. Hope to read more poetry of yours.
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Thank you so much 🙂
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Really good for a start. 🙂
Even I’m a beginner, so I can relate.
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Simple and beautiful 🙂
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Thank you so much 🙂
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Beautiful..💜
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Thank you so much 🙂
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Bahut sunder abhivyakti .. mere apno ko roothne ki adat bahut hai .. sunder
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Dhanyawaad 🙂 🙂
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Abhaar
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very touching
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Waaah mdm ji khubsoorat likha he…bht pyara…bdhai…
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Thank you thank you 🙂 🙂
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Plzure plzure…aise hi likhte raho..😊😊
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Your first attempt doesn’t look like First .
Terrific 👌🏻
Keep doing 🙂
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hey thanks a lot 🙂
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……and an masterful attempt!!! loved the emotions and flow…… 🙂 🙂
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Thank you so much 🙂 🙂
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you are very welcome!!! 🙂 🙂
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Wah! Bahut achi hai tumhari poetry! Likhti rehna! *claps*
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Thank you so much Hira 🙂 🙂
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You’re welcome Anamika! 🙂
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Lovely! ❤ 🙂
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Thanks a lot 🙂
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1 st wonderful attempt 😊
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Thanks a lot 🙂 🙂
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Beautiful Anamika, loved each and every word of your poem. Too good.
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Thanks a lot ,thank you for reading and glad that you liked it so much 🙂 🙂
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Yes so much of love Anamika in your poem and even scared to take it again or not.
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Thank you so much for understanding 🙂 🙂
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Wonderful poem anamika .. Itni achi Hindi me like sakti ho toh u should continue it. It touched my soul
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Thank you so much dear ,it just came naturally .Let’s see if I’ll be able to write more .If I can ,I would love to 🙂
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U can dear. And I would love to read it.. U express it so well .. As always love what u write .
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Thank you so much for your encouragement and support 🙂
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Thank YOU for giving us delightful posts..
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Pleasure is all mine 🙂 🙂
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Read it twice.. N loved it each time more
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Thank you so much 🙂 🙂 ,means a lot
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your first attempt is great…believe if a person can write so creatively in eng she can write in any language….one advice pls use hindi words for hindi poems…it will add more beauty to it…u have mentioned that you didn’t use hindi because u might end up making mistakes…but my dear, its okay to make mistakes.afterall its your first attempt and if u try,u will improve n then u will no longer make mistakes…i have personal experience.i too am very weak in hindi…but i am improving…even i have just recently started writing in hindi….so it worked for me..hope it works out for u too….good luck!!
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Thanks a lot priya ,I will definitely try to use hindi words 🙂 ,its just I was scared of typing mistakes i would while using hindi but you truly said .If we will not make mistake ,we will not improve 🙂 🙂
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make mistakes…no one will laugh at you or make fun of you…because no one is perfect and no one is dull…we all are humans….we can only improve…
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Thanks a lot for your motivating words 🙂 🙂
Loads of love
Anamika
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Wow never ever felt that this was your first attempt in Hindi. Great flow and lot of emotions too, a bit negative but then it had pain too.
You nailed it my friend.
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Thank you so much 🙂 🙂 ,means a lot
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Keep smile
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All the best
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Keep it writting
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Wishes
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My good with you
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टुटने की नहीं, जुड़ने की सोचो,
जो सपने देखे हैं, वो सपने पूरा करने की सोचो,
सपने देखते तो कभी हैं, उन सपनों को जिंदा करना भी सीखो….!!!!
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Don’t worry, we are all with you…😊
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Thank you so much rajeev 🙂
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